mindseye: Well, no one else has spoken up, but I like it. I like the ZNH reference, the fact that the story builds up slowly, and the characters are fleshed out a bit -- not just cardboard cutouts with big dicks.
The third paragraph needs work -- maybe there's a missing word, or maybe 'send' should be 'sent', or something. I get the gist of what it's saying, but can't parse it.
When do we get to see more?
The third paragraph needs work -- maybe there's a missing word, or maybe 'send' should be 'sent', or something. I get the gist of what it's saying, but can't parse it.
When do we get to see more?
